Dream Deep

Better on this edit, Gyr, by far - it's come along nicely and there's not much more I can suggest you look at. It reads at a nice pace and ...

Er... I told you to click the 'Literary' tab up top... ^_^ Then on into the Poetry forums. No matter, we'll have Imp move it. (Thank you, Imp, for finding ...

Much better on the rewrite, Gyr. It has a much more polished feel now. ^_^ I got a better glimpse of both Mattira and Danteel in this scene. Though there ...

Congrats, Meshy, again. ^_^ But it's strange seeing you now - I keep expecting green. You'll do a fine job, of course.

The best way for me to respond is to give you more. Be warned, you might want to have something...punchable on hand for this one. Heh, you give yourself too ...

Again, as in the case of 'Act' - superb writing, Clau, set against a background of the shocking. It's powerful and deeply disturbing at the same time. The reader feels ...

And it's Fedya's Sketch! ^_^ Polished up, dressed up and revised, of course. It's come along nicely since the original posting on SBS, Imp. I can't take credit for that, ...

Good rhyme scheme, Clau, it's quite solid and reads well. I don't think the length is a problem at all, to be honest - it's just as long as it ...

I love you Gyr. ^_^ More specifically, I love how you write, but a simple 'I love you' works, too. To give you something to gauge it off of, this ...

polka

^ 7/10 - Amusing ^_^

Oy, Jig, with you having posted an entry like this, I don't stand a chance. >< Though, competition aside, this is a fine piece and I wish you the best ...

Thank you so much, Clau and Imp, for the crits and comments. ^_~ I will edit them in directly. I do apologise, though, for the typos and verbosity in places. ...

Portrait in Twilight: The Death - A Duel in Surreality: 13 January, 2007 ...:Previously "Letting Go":... ... Death prowled in the streets of Eudraid, a shadow coming down through the ...

5/10 - Getting old... used to be Crysi's, I think, in a previous life?